Victory 5 Sentence Fiction

This was the moment to surrender all common decency and politeness; it was every man for himself as the announcement was made causing the crowd to surge forward without a care in the world for anyone else. Tanya was jostled, barged and pushed as she walked calmly forward; not liking, but very used to this behaviour until the corner of a briefcase caught her sharply in the hip as it was swung madly by a Mr Briefcase Man, all in the name of being first and without even an utter of a apology.

There was one middle seat left on the packed commuter train and Tanya squeezed herself in, sitting next to Mr Briefcase Man, tucked behind his newspaper, trying desperately to ignore the young mum with her screaming toddler and bags of shopping; if he succeeded, maybe she’d go away!

‘You can have my seat’ offered Tanya and she stood, letting the mother and child sit as Mr Briefcase Man huffed and puffed, rustling his newspaper angrily.

‘Oh thank you so much’ replied the mum, her face a relieved smile as she sat with her child on her lap, surrounded by her shopping bags and Tanya smiled a winning smile as frustration slipped into anger on the face of Mr Briefcase Man as his journey was now being ‘interrupted’ by a child and when the toddler accidently spilt his drink all over him, Tanya couldn’t help but turn away and laugh. 


What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction