Wednesday 27 February 2013

5 Sentence Fiction Abandoned





Bit late this week with the 5SF but been a rather busy week. This short story is based on true events from a trip to Hyde Park in London on Saturday for an unofficial 'meet the fans'. Because it was unofficial  there were no police, no barriers so of course with thousands of teenage girls, it went pear shaped! x   

Chaos

 It wasn't supposed to have ended like this; lying on the cold concrete floor of the park, a face blotchy from tears that streamed down her young face as the hoard of teenage girls ran screaming.  
This was supposed to be the most exciting, amazing day of her life but instead her friends had abandoned her in their frenzy to catch a glimpse of their idols, not even noticing that Saffron wasn't there after tripping over the fencing; lucky not to have been trampled in the surge and chaos.
Miles away from home in a park she didn't know, Saffron trembled from the cold as well as from the realisation that the police were now calling her parents.
The strangers had been kind to the point of fussing when all she wanted to do was find her friends, see her idols and be part of the madness that had descended on the usually tranquil park.

But the worry of her parent’s anger soon vanished as Saffron finally grasped that she had been abandoned twice that day as the ‘band’ had now left the madness for the safety of their hotel and Saffron never even got to see them as she was carried to the ambulance.



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6 comments:

  1. These fan based things can be rough can't they! My daughter went to a concert the other day and got caught in a fight amongst the throng of bodies...scary stuff!

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    1. I couldn't believe the utter chaos and that poor girl. It seemed to fit the prompt; shame it was true. x

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  2. This can be really scary. It seems like everyone seems to forget everything when they see someone famous

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    1. It was mental. As the crowd grew, I knew it would turn ugly as there was no security , police or barriers.

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  3. I can't even imagine how scared this young girl had to be. It had to be terrifying.

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    1. it was and she was scared. Another girl walked by minus a shoe, limping and crying and another walked by sobbing her heart out but that was because she had seen her idols. . . it was confusing to say the least. xx

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