Second entry into the Inkinglettes Love Bites, Anti-Slush blog hop. I think seeing as I may be a judge (still being debated), it doesn't matter how many times I enter. And if there's a little story to tell, you have to just tell it. x
May the Force (of Love) Be With You.
Amy’s eyes followed Adam; head buried in papers unable to
see where he was going let alone who was in the room. He sat at his desk, absorbed in his work. She’d
loved Adam since he arrived six months, three weeks, two days and one hour and
nine minutes ago; obviously love at first sight.
She knew he didn't have a girlfriend despite the many
admires for his heart (and body). Being Valentine’s Day, it seemed right to
send a rose and card with little clues that would lead him romantically to her.
Too many Mills and Boon novels had diluted her thinking of the real world; love
always the answer, the most powerful force in the universe and Amy was going to
use that force on Adam today.
The tux wearing courier (with red bow tie) waltzed in
singing his Valentine tune of love as he delivered Valentines. Eagerly, Amy watched Adam’s face light up as
he opened his card and smelt the rose. His smoky eyes drifted across the office
and Amy’s heart stopped, she daren’t breath. Her Mills and Boon romance was
coming true as Adam walked with such purpose towards her, such intensity in his
gaze.
There was no one else in the room; such was her passion for
the man walking towards her. She didn't even notice Pete sitting next to her
until Adam took him by the hands, gazing deep into his eyes.
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This was great, not sure if I should of but this made me laugh. Just brilliant. X
ReplyDeleteHee hee, my hubby laughed when he read it and gave his approval. I think a laugh is apt in this situation . . .unless you're Amy ;-) x
DeleteThis was unexpectedly funny and lovely all at once! I'm with Laura - it caught me off guard and I laughed out loud!! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you. I tried to write seductively, romantically, but ended up with the laugh. What can you do? I never knew I had the comedy in my writing so woo hoo. xxx
DeleteI wonder what Pete thought! Very funny. :)
ReplyDeleteYes, that's an angle to explore . . .oh for more words! xxx
DeleteI'm with drmagoo...what did Pete think? Was he expecting to be swept off his feet too? Hee hee, loved this Elisabeth!
ReplyDeleteThanks Lisa. I'm hoping all was ok with Pete and Adam . . . I'm sure they were on the same wave length . . . . oh for more words. x
DeleteOh no! I have to admit, I laughed. :) Very nicely done. Poor Amy. Her Prince will come along some day.
ReplyDeleteI'm sure Amy's prince will turn up one day. I'm glad it made you laugh. xx
DeleteLovely story a very romantic build up and a great twist!
ReplyDeleteJust goes to show that true love never happens like it does in the pages of a Mills and Boon!
I know. . . I wanted to do a bit of romance as I do kinda like it . . . .xx
DeleteEat your heart out girlie - it's still love (says the writer of M:M fiction)
ReplyDeleteIndeed it is so for Peter and Adam it's far away from Love Bites. x
DeleteLol.. How cool was that... I am just hoping that Peter is not his partner o he is going to want to know where that rose came from...x
ReplyDeleteNow there's a twist I didn't think of. . . . oh for a few more words lol. xxx
DeleteAw! Poor Amy, loved this brilliant build up then hit with the twist!
ReplyDeleteThank you. It's amazing what we have all come up with, twisting that knife. xx
DeleteNice way with the twist at the end... I dig it!
ReplyDeleteThank you. xx
DeleteMade me smile, and felt badly for the poor girl! What a bummer! Good writing.
ReplyDeleteThanks Miranda. I'm pleased you liked it. xx
DeleteI adore this line: "She’d loved Adam since he arrived six months, three weeks, two days and one hour and nine minutes ago". So sad & charming & well written. I'd like to follow this girl in more adventures--she's so emotionally accessible with her heart on her sleeve (love her!)
ReplyDeleteThank you Diane, such a positive, lovely comment!! I'd like to write more about her too; will have to think. . . .xxx
DeleteSo sad for her :( Very well written.
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