Saturday 24 May 2014

Anchor 5 Sentence Fiction

Kim lay on the sun drenched deck enjoying sudden spurts of ocean spray, cooling her sizzling skin, before the pirate ship anchored in the lee of a small deserted island.  The gentle lapping of  turquoise waters met a short strip of white sand where a barbecue was already cooking in the shadow of a cluster of palm trees, as Kim began to spray coconut oil all over her already golden skin, determined to make the most of her last day on holiday, wishing she could stay in paradise forever.
       She tried to ignore the history and stories of pirates on the island; stranded by other pirates with nothing more than a pistol and a bottle of rum, turning on each other before going mad with the sun, until panicking voices made her sit up.
       “I've no idea why they’ve sailed away, the tour guide began, “but I’m sure they’re playing some sort of joke and we’ll be back on board in the blink of an eye,” she said, trying to hide the alarm in her voice.
      Staring out to sea, Kim saw the pirate ship appear to get smaller, becoming nothing more than a speck on the horizon as the sun began to sink, casting a shadow of uncertainty and fear across the island and its new inhabitants.

Written for Lillie McFerrin's 5 Sentence Fiction where you can read all the entries. x

14 comments:

  1. Ooh looks like you could go on with the story here :) picturesque words used :)

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    1. Thank you. I hadn't thought of continuing but will see what the next prompt is and whether I can work it in . . :-) Thanks for visiting and commenting. x

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  2. What story & a gripping ending, Lizzie :) Am sure the new inhabitants of the island will be rescued soon :)

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    1. Let's hope so before the rum runs out lol. Thanks for visiting and taking time to comment! x

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  3. wow...the story's written in such an amazing manner.....could feel the holidaying scene :)

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    1. Thank you!! Wishing I was enjoying a holiday!! Just love them. Thank you for taking time to read and comment! :-)

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  4. Great story...now I would like to know what happens next!
    Here is my offering: http://mcguffysreader.blogspot.com/2014/05/brother.html

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    1. Will think about a next, although not very good at serials; tried it before and it kinda fizzled out. But we'll see. Thanks for reading and commenting!! Hopping over to read yours! :-)

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  5. OHhhh.....interesting!!! Will they be rescued or will they be content being the new inhabitants? I need to know what happens next. It's a cliffhanger!!!

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    1. Hee, hee. I like a good cliffhanger! xxx

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  6. Ooo great ending, will they ever get of this lovely island before they go mad?

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    1. Good question Chick, good question! xxx

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  7. Okay now am curious.. A sequel maybe?? To appease the curiosity of your readers? :P

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    1. Be cruel to leave my readers hanging. . . :-) x

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