Wednesday, 22 January 2014

Five Sentence Fiction Clutch







Josie hadn’t realised her newly polished nails dug deep into the fleshy stems despite the thorns puncturing her skin causing thin trails of blood to trickle down her wrist, forming tiny droplets that fell unseen onto her silk dress. She clutched her father’s arm, pulling back slightly in her hesitancy to complete the short walk to the new chapter in her life; he patted her hand gently, giving her a reassuring smile, remembering well the nerves that toyed with his emotions thirty years ago.


Closer she walked, not registering the friendly faces gazing upon her, not seeing the smiling face of her groom, not hearing the music over the wild, erratic beating of her heart. Instead, etched on her eyes, words not meant for her, words now spiralling around her head, words digging deep like a blade.


“Nothing needs to change between us Aaron, just cos you’re getting hitched lol,” were the fracturing words Josie read on the way to the church, ”I’ll be waiting Babes, love Amy.”



Written for Lillie Mcferrin's Five Sentence Fiction where you can read all the other stories for this week's prompt- clutch.



14 comments:

  1. Great concept, need more punctuation to get those long sentences working! LOL nice little piece.

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    1. Yeah, that first sentence killed me! x

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  2. Really enjoyed reading this, Lizzie. :)

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    1. Thanks Becky! Nice to be back in the 5SF frame of mind even if my first sentence was a bit long. xx

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  3. She has stuff to worry about, that's for certain!

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    1. I know. Not the best timing. Thanks for stopping by. x

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  4. Lovely. Would like to know what she says at the altar! This could be an eventful wedding...

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    1. Yeah me too. Glad I didn't get that far as I wouldn't know what to say! xx

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  5. I don't like Amy, tell her to leave Aaron alone, he's getting married!!!! lol. I do love this 5 sentence fiction. So much info into a short piece!!! I want more.

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    1. She's a meanie bum beanie! Sorry to leave you hanging on this one but I have no more . . . yet. ;-) x

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  6. Good piece, I hope she says something to him at the altar - this story could go far I suspect!

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    1. Thanks. If the right prompt comes up, I may continue. xx

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  7. Ooo man, that would suck. I hope she slapped in the face. Lol

    Awesome piece though!

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    1. I think that outcome would be the only one and justified! x

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