Sunday, 10 February 2013

Love Bites, Anti-Slush Blog Hop


First Holiday




After thirty years, Pamela and Toby were going on their first holiday together, although it would be their last and they were going to make the most of it. Toby struggled as the case clunked loudly. She smiled at him and Toby smiled back, not something either of them had done in years. 
The journey was long, silent except for Pamela’s tutting every time Toby coughed, sneezed and breathed. He ignored her like he always did, turning up the radio. After hours on the road, the rugged hills replaced the concrete causing Toby and Pamela to knowingly smile again at each other. They were nearing their destination.
Parking up the car, they both stuffed their rucksacks with what they needed, ready for their hike into the woods. Following the ancient map and old stories, they finally came across a clearing where they began to set about their preparations as the sun dipped behind the trees.
Pamela and Toby held hands and began to chant then all was still. And they waited. The delicate ringing of the bells they laid told them they were no longer alone. Pamela stood and stared at the cause of her misery. Toby aimed the crossbow and fired. It hit the target true.
“Now that’s got rid of that idiot, best we hurry back for our divorce hearing. I don’t want to be late for that.”
“Pammy? That felt good.” Toby grinned, not having called his wife that in yeas, retrieving the arrow from Cupid’s chest.  

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And that's my entry for the Love Bites Anti-Slush blog hop run by the Inklingettes. If you wish to participate  then click on the link below for a full guide on prizes on offer, those pesky rules. You can click on the linky at the bottom of this page to upload your wonderful story for the blog hop too and read and comment on others if you wish. Have lots of Inky fun and mischief folks.





27 comments:

  1. And so Cupid bites the dust, just love it. :)

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    1. Thank you. I think he deserved it where this couple are concerned lol. xx

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  2. Ahahahaha! Absolutely perfect! I love that their first and last vacation was to put LOVE out of its misery! Take that, Cupid!! xoxo ;)

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    1. Yep; after 30 bitter years, I think it was deserved. xx

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  3. At first I thought they'd kidnapped Cupid and he was in the clunky case...but I liked the way they lured him in instead, poor old Cupid!

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    1. I never thought of that . . . now there's an idea. xxx

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  4. You had me hooked, I needed to know what they were doing, and what a brilliant ending! Very well done, and very anti-valentine!

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    1. Thank you Miranda. I'm pleased you liked.I did want to ad more at the end but ran out of words. . . .maybe that;s a good thing. x

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  5. Devious, no doubt!
    And I agree with the lovely Ruth, sometimes ya just gotta put love down like the mangy dog that it is. ;)

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    1. Haha. so true. I'm surprised they waited 30 years to do it! x

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    1. Yes, my friend said the same thing. . . .me thinks Cupid better stay out of the way. x

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  7. Cupid bites the dust again. Well written, as always. Like the journey to where it all started, 30 years ago, and how it ends where it began. Nice circle.

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    1. Thank you. And now they can start a fresh . . . .apart Thank you for the positve feedback. x

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  8. You'll probably shoot me down now but do I still detect the tiniest bit of romance left when he calls her "Pammy" at the end?

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    1. You're not wrong. . .I wanted to try and convey that once there was romance and even though it's too late for them, their little 'excursion' has reminded them of what they once had; common ground, togetherness . . shame it's over really. x

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  9. Wow, two in a row where cupid gets it! LOL. He's a goner.

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    1. Yeah, I kinda realised that when I wrote it but they do come from different angles so are unique in that respect. Anyway Cupid deserves it sometimes. xx

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  10. Good Lord, so much hate for poor Cupid! :) Very well done. Loved the detail with the bells and crossbow.

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    1. Thank you. I think after 30 years, it could be justified . . . I did have much fun writing this one :-) x

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  11. This made me smile, very well done! :)

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  12. I sooooooo love it that the one thing that brought them together as a couple after all of these years was killing Cupid. What a brilliant & fitting twist! Great story

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    1. Thank you Diane; hopefully not all lost. . . .xxx

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  13. OHH! I soooo need to know where this clearing is...

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