Another week and another chance for some 5 Sentence Fiction. This week is Inspire and I have been truly inspired by reading all the flash fictions for the Masquerade and by reading Dodger by Terry Pratchett (my first time of reading his work and sure not to be the last). So here is my take on Inspire. If you want to read more flash fiction on Inspire then visit lillie mcferrin . You won't be disappointed. xxx
Victorian Night Walk
The choking, thick smog still hung stagnant as the setting of the sun gave way to night; bringing with it the night people with their shouting, drinking, light fingers and fights, all looking for a way out of their own personal hell.But all this drowning of sorrows in cheep gin and beer among the grimy alleyways of the capital was just what Charles needed; their desperation for want of a better life or even a meal the next morning fuelled Charles’ desire to explore this seedy part of existence.
His coach halted by the Thames and he stepped out in just shined boots and new cloak with a cane in his gloved hand and he began to stroll in the damp night, wanting to get closer, watching this life unfold around him; their destitution and despair, their only escape the tankard of beer.
It was no place for children, urchins as they were known, but they scurried about, lapping up the dregs of the tankards with eagerness before a belt around the ear made them duck for cover; it was all there for Charles to see, the sheer pitiful sight that had to be told.
Inspired by the night’s walk, Charles looked at his notes and a story formed as he began to write with great expectations ‘Oliver’; soon everyone would know exactly what Victorian London was truly like. . .
Love the descriptions of what he is seeing :)ReplyDelete
Cool. Thanks. So much to see but some of it not very nice. xDelete
This is wonderful! I was drawn right in. The vivid details, descriptions, and flow made me feel like I was watching a movie. Well done. :)ReplyDelete
Wow. Thank you. I really enjoyed writing this one. xDelete
Brilliant portrayal of Dickensian London, didn't know where you were going with this but delighted when it became clear! A reread really brought it alive with all the Oliver references!ReplyDelete
That'll be drinking the gin and beer as sung by Nancy. xxDelete
You had me at "Victorian." Always an interesting period, and one that I haven't seen done in the FSF challenges.ReplyDelete
Thank you. I love my history and really do not write enough of it. xDelete
A great take on the prompt, even dickensian in its style.ReplyDelete
ooh, what a fab complement; Dickens was the master of description . . .for pages and pages lol. xxDelete
A superb evocation... it must have been just like that! :)ReplyDelete
Thank you. Not good times if you were poor. xDelete
Nice to catch up with your blog again :-)ReplyDelete
And what a powerful image you write x.
Hello Lesley. Lovely to see you back! And with a lovely comment too. xxxDelete
You surprised me, I thought for a minute that you were going down the "Jack the Ripper" path! The Dickens one is more pleasant though, even if the surroundings of the time weren't. Anything set in Victorian-period England is alright with me :)ReplyDelete
I was! But didn't have enough sentences then this just popped in my head which I'm pleased about as maybe the Ripper route may have been a tad predictable. I like to surprise. Thanks for stopping by. xxDelete