What it’s all about:
Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each
week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will
write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to
appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction. (http://lilliemcferrin.blogspot.co.uk/)
This week:
WICKED
Although the sky was pitch black and desolate, the horse
galloped confidently through the winding, rugged hills with its rider clinging
on, shielding himself in the mane from the swirling wind. His pursuers had
dropped back long ago, the sound of hooves and rifles no more; but the rider
couldn’t relax until he reached his destination.
The flickering , dimming light in the distance gave off a warm glow of safety
and refuge as the rider began to relax and the horse slowed to a casual trot.
Patting the horse gently and turning off the warning lantern, the rider walked into the dilapidated building and
saw his partner waiting in the darkest corner of the room, a single candle
burning lower, the only light. Tipping a small, black velvet pouch onto the table,
small, shining stones, belonging to the King, tumbled out as the Highway Man smiled
knowingly.
Mmmm ... a highwayman is the loveliest kind of wicked! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ruth!!! I like to think so. xxx
DeleteSo glad you have joined in the five sentence challenges! I find these are great writing practice and also helpful in starting to explore ideas that might be used in longer pieces. Think you did a great job with setting the scene, really felt the situation - the night and the desperation. I wonder what happened to the King?!
ReplyDeleteI kind of like my Highway Man too; why do we like those characters that are so villanous and wicked? As for the King? Well if the song is correct 'Stand and deliver, your money or your life', I'm sure he survived his encounter . . .
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comments :-). Can't wait for the next challenge. xx
Thank you for joining! I really like this! And, that last sentence leaves so many questions that I'm certain have many interesting answers :) Great job!!
ReplyDeleteThank you chick. I like to give a reader questions as it means usually, they want to read on which is awlays good. I mentioned it to someone at work and she wants to see my piece as a posibility to introduce to her class. I think it'll get the creative juices flowing. xx
ReplyDeletePS I want to do another one! xx
Enjoyed this. Good contrast between the action of the 'flight', and the 'reveal'
ReplyDeleteof his trawl. Thanks.
Thank you for you comment and taking time to read. I'm so pleased you liked it; it inspires me to do more. xxx
DeleteThe atmosphere of this is amazing. For a few moments in time I was no longer surrounded by screaming 8th graders. I was following this night rider and his steady steed. I've always loved the mystery and danger of highway men and you did that romantic ideal a lot of justice. A complete story in five sentences---I'm floored.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your commnet. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I can't wait to write another. To be honest, I was inspired by the poem 'The Highway Man' which we are studying in class so I can't take all the credit. xx
Deletegreat idea, lizzie, can't wait to read more! ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you! xx
DeleteI remember this!!!! Oh my gosh. Only a year and a bit ago. And we are doing the Highway man again in year 5 this week coming up and last week. I don't understand why my comment from last year isn't here. Anyway yep I loved this when I read it back then and still do.xxxx
ReplyDeleteI thought you'd commented too; maybe it was on my facebook page? But yes, the Highwayman strikes again in Year 5 and I still love it. Thanks honey. It's one of my favourite pieces and it's in Katie Button!!! xxxx
DeleteYes it is in Katie Button!!! Love it.
DeleteYou can't go wrong with a Highwayman! If this was your first piece, then you've always been a natural! Love it Lizzie x
ReplyDeleteThank you Lisa. Yes, my first flash. . . .I had the poem of same name as my muse; year 5 literacy and just love the romanticism. xx
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