tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post2963822657291503471..comments2023-10-22T16:41:05.861+01:00Comments on Lizzie Koch Author : Composure 5 Sentence FicitonAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09547723072723614894noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-34393673701519428952012-08-30T17:40:40.595+01:002012-08-30T17:40:40.595+01:00Hey last one for now, your story reminded me of yo...Hey last one for now, your story reminded me of your police story, very good!clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09269342486113922039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-82358739796371295582012-07-19T05:41:33.080+01:002012-07-19T05:41:33.080+01:00You had me at the Audrey Hepburn photo! You captu...You had me at the Audrey Hepburn photo! You captured the anxiety of the moment very well.JTsuruokahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173187123835069767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-72258086387761635162012-07-18T05:52:17.253+01:002012-07-18T05:52:17.253+01:00Love the twist, leads you on as a typical stage fr...Love the twist, leads you on as a typical stage fright tale before throwing in the true implicationssjphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05772883091207430753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-26978811183436220362012-07-17T09:48:55.970+01:002012-07-17T09:48:55.970+01:00Enjoyed it. I agree with Jo-Anne, another read th...Enjoyed it. I agree with Jo-Anne, another read through aloud might benefit. I got a good sense of your female character here.Sandra Crookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00534491053812317718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-80142967546541867152012-07-16T05:42:37.335+01:002012-07-16T05:42:37.335+01:00My reading of this was that she ended up having a ...My reading of this was that she ended up having a heart attack, I didn't think she was shot. I think it's a very good story, Lizzie,a great take on the prompt. If you go back and just have a read through (reading it aloud) you may see a couple of places to tighten it up (if you want). I'm also happy to read a story where the court officer is a woman - a nice change.:))Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-41184767314798265292012-07-15T23:19:09.816+01:002012-07-15T23:19:09.816+01:00Sounds to me like she turned up at a routine call ...Sounds to me like she turned up at a routine call last summer and was shot, for no reason, by the man with the vacant stare. Now she's terrified of facing him in court at his trial...more so now she's seen those same cold, steel blue eyes staring back at her...<br />I liked your description of her nerves, especially the clammy palms and mouth!<br />Enjoyed your use of the prompt Lizzie...and extra points for getting Audrey Hepburn (Queen of cool composure) in there!Lisa Shambrookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12767127776898278402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3644161861541388781.post-83168444838294052522012-07-14T23:04:11.620+01:002012-07-14T23:04:11.620+01:00Who shot her? Was the guy with blue eyes someone ...Who shot her? Was the guy with blue eyes someone she'd once arrested and he was on trial now? I want to give you some constructive feedback, but I'm just a little confused here.Jayne Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01053366144206401836noreply@blogger.com